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Lost

09 Jun

I came across Five Sentence Fiction today and this week’s word fit perfectly for the next part of Dawson’s Mission.

What it’s all about: Five Sentence Fiction is about packing a powerful punch in a tiny fist. Each week I will post a one word inspiration, then anyone wishing to participate will write a five sentence story based on the prompt word. The word does not have to appear in your five sentences, just use it for direction.

This week: LOST

Lurches of dread anchored Carolyn’s heart as the doctor’s words flowed from his baritone voice box.

Useless apologies shredded through the phone line.

‘The baby, a figment of your own longing,’ a voice from within echoed.

The ground rumbled open waving arms of despair, reaching, tempting her to join.

It was in this moment she surrendered her ability to feel faith again.

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8 responses to “Lost

  1. Victoria C. Slotto

    June 11, 2012 at 9:42 PM

    So much tragedy in just a few words…and more than one loss in this. Nicely done.

     
    • Chelle

      June 11, 2012 at 9:58 PM

      Thank you, Victoria.

       
  2. Imelda

    June 12, 2012 at 6:10 AM

    Oh…how sad, much sadder than having had a miscarriage which I thought it was at first when I read the earlier segment of this story. Hmp! Her husband will really give her trouble now.
    I look forward to the next part. 🙂

     
    • Chelle

      June 12, 2012 at 8:42 AM

      Yes, she will have some sadness and trials to go through, especially with that husband of hers!

       
  3. Lora Mitchell

    June 12, 2012 at 9:18 PM

    Reading the previous comments, I think I’m missing a beat here because they mention the husband. Is this an ongoing serial? I may be off track but I get from this piece that she is barren and the badly-wanted baby, a figment of her imagination.

     
    • Chelle

      June 13, 2012 at 8:35 AM

      Hi Lora. Yes, it is an ongoing piece. I have the link for the previous segments in the post if you’re interested in catching up.

       
  4. Lillie McFerrin

    June 17, 2012 at 5:52 PM

    Wow! Such emotion in so few words. Nicely done. Thanks so much for linking up with FSF.

     

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